Thursday, March 24, 2011

The query

The query, as I have said, and as other people will no doubt attest, is your primary sales-pitch to an agent. Basically, they all follow the same form and function: introduction, "what's going on," brief information about style, genre, word count, etc., and closing salutation.

Here's mine (current version)--I say "current version" because like all good things, it is constantly improving and chaotic.


LOCARNO's death delays Armageddon.

Born long ago, raised by a cabal of sorcerers, Locarno quickly becomes embroiled in a plot overseen by a rogue element of the church--Dies Irae--against which he must not fail, for he is mankind's only hope; and at stake is the loss of civilization itself. Revealed within are the events leading to the possible "Day of Wrath" that Dies Irae wishes to bring forth--forcing God to disown humanity and wipe clean the slate of creation.

But Locarno is just a boy, not yet a man; and while he studies his secret sorcery, he soon gains the affections of JULIANA, the daughter of one of his GRANDFATHER'S inner circle, and love blooms. With their passion rising, so too does the danger. Compounding the threat that Dies Irae represents is the doubly troubling sudden appearance of feral vampires.

Captured, failed, and slain, Locarno rises as a Lord of Death, and his vengeance is truly profound; but for all his possessed prowess he may have only forestalled the inevitable.

MEMORIES OF THE DEAD, my first novel, is complete at 72,000 words and is aimed at the young-adult market. Although not intended to be such, it could be expanded into a series.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.

Kind Regards,

Not really bad, but to date, this query has gotten me a handful of "no thanks" replies. Perhaps I should submit this to Query Shark? Kind of afraid to do so... They can be vicious fish over there (even though I love them), and besides...this very same query I submitted to Janet already. It would be "awkward" to submit it to her sharky goodness after the fact, yes?

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