Wednesday, April 27, 2011

More query hell

Well, I think we're at version 6 now...


Dear XXXXX:

Raised by a cabal of sorcerers, a boy named Locarno watches helplessly as people around him begin to die. Dies Irae, a rogue element of the church, is murdering civilians and creating chaos so God will wipe clean the slate of creation. In order to fight Dies Irae, Locarno undertakes a magical ritual which will augment his occult abilities as well as provide life beyond death. When he is captured and killed by agents of Dies Irae the magic finally takes hold, and he rises as a lord of death, enacting revenge by slaughtering them, one by one.

MEMORIES OF THE DEAD, a young adult/fantasy novel, is complete at 72,000 words.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.

Kind Regards,


 Is it any better? What do you think? It is certainly clear and concise. But does it "grab you"? You tell me, man...I only work here....

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