Monday, April 4, 2011

Revised (version 4) query

Here's the latest and hopefully greatest:

Dear XXXXX:

Locarno's death delays Armageddon.


Born long ago, raised by a cabal of sorcerers, he quickly becomes embroiled in a plot overseen by a rogue element of the church against which he must not fail for he is mankind's only hope, and at stake is the loss of all civilization. But he's just a boy, not yet a man; and while he studies his secret sorcery, he soon gains the affections of Juliana, the daughter of one of his grandfather's inner circle, and love blooms. With their passion rising, so too does the danger: compounding the threat that Dies Irae represents is the doubly-troubling sudden appearance of feral vampires. Captured, failed, and finally slain, Locarno rises as a Lord of Death, and his vengeance is truly profound; but for his possessed prowess he may have only forestalled the inevitable.


MEMORIES OF THE DEAD, my first novel, a first-person narrative, is complete at 72,000 words and is aimed at the young-adult market.


Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.


Kind Regards,


It's got a hook, the mini-synopsis, the info section, ending salutation and close. All the things it should have. I just hope someone bites.

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