Thursday, July 26, 2012

Five Sentence Fiction – Perseverance

The Five Sentence Fiction is a simple idea:
Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
This week, the chosen word is "Perseverance." What does it mean to persevere, and what kind of person does it? Why, it means to simply carry on; and everyone, it seems, does it all the time, every day, without glory, or song, or even sometimes something as small as hope.

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He hates his job: the long hours, the sweat, the tears, and his bruised, aching bones give ample testimony to him having been ground deep under the heel of his backbreaking bosses.

The profit is not shared, his labors are many; and each night, late into the evening, he returns home with pains that wrack his frail form.

The agony is unending, and sleep does not heal -- he knows no rest -- his joints reverberate with ratcheting vocal lamentations while his blood boils in his veins as he hopes for a greater day, a future where such as his lot is but a faded memory.

Yet, each morning that seemingly comes earlier with every new dawn, he rouses and reclaims his yoke; and though his body screams, he is silent and he carries on again only to repeat his sufferings until night when he collapses onto his bed too exhausted to even breathe.

But this is his prize: no, not his bed, but she who shares it with him -- and their child -- for here in this place, though he is battered and beaten, broken and beleaguered, he is home.

16 comments:

  1. I really liked this one. Hit home.

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  2. In five sentences you've managed to demonstrate the often inextricable relationship between perseverance and self-sacrifice. Very nice post.

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    1. Thank you, Gina, for your very kind words. I am inspired by them and the kudos that others give.

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  3. This is heavy, a very rich five sentences. Powerful stuff.

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  4. This is great, powerful. I'm sure most fathers can relate to this one. And what better reason for perservering than for your child?

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    1. I think everyone can relate. Thanks, Janelle! :)

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  5. Oh my gosh! I love this!I wish I'd read this before posting mine so I could pinch the idea and dedicate it to my long suffering hubby who is up at 4am for a 12 hour shift starting at 6 and home at 8pm! I shall get him to read this!!xx

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    1. Thank you! :) That is the best compliment of all.

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  6. A really great job with this, with the timeless style that says this is how things have always been and how they will always be. Well done!

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  7. I recently saw an interview about miners and this is what first came to mind when i read this. I found it interesting that you were writing about persevering through the daily grind as opposed to persevering to achieve something more. I really liked it and your style.

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