Thursday, February 28, 2013

Five Sentence Fiction – Empty

The Five Sentence Fiction is a simple idea:
Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
This week, Lillie chose the word "Empty," and here I find a town of our ghastly past.

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The city was a forgotten relic of the Cold War, hidden deep in the Urals of what was Soviet Russia.  
Nothing lived there now except the grasses that blew in the breeze -- a near desert surrounded by lush fields where even the wildlife does not roam.  
Once a center of science for the State, this place, now empty, stood as a stark reminder that man is not God, and when we climb high we fall further. 
 The craters of destroyed lives will be found where we crash.  
Weaponizing life can produce the greatest death, which is what happened here; and even the harshest winter’s cold cannot kill that which soiled the once pristine ground. 

22 comments:

  1. Sdly there is more truth than fiction in this and such places do exist created by man hungry for power.

    Beautifully crafted writing.

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  2. A sadly realistic story, and very well told.

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  3. The first inagine I got reading this is what happened in Chernobyl many years ago.

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    1. Actually, I was going to go that route, but at the last moment chose to change the location and the type of disaster that happened.

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    2. Interesting I was able to see that you had originally that about Chernobyl, even though it had happened in April, I thought about the "nuclear winter" experienced there. I guess there's something to the saying of great minds thinking alike. :-)

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  4. You managed to convey all the heaviness of the desecration as well as the consequences in these dynamic five sentences. Nicely done.

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    1. Thank you, Rossandra! I'm glad you liked it.

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  5. Very thought-provoking Phil, it also brought nuclear disasters to my mind too, there are far too many sites like this around the world. Love your third sentence!

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  6. "...and even the harshest winter’s cold cannot kill that which soiled the once pristine ground." Wow. Helluva powerful ending.

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    1. Thanks, Jayne. I'm glad you liked it. :)

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  7. A harsh scenario that offered a stark reminder of what happens when we let science and technology run wild without concern for morality and eventual impact. We have to consider the future and we have to take account of right and wrong. Thought provoking, and powerful... well done!

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  8. I am reminded of a trip to the Somme where the fields were/are so green and lush but silence. . . .not a bird to be heard or an insect buzzing and that;s fro a conventional war. A well written piece that should make us all think. x

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  9. Wonderful figurative spin on the prompt. Strong, stark, shrewd. Nice work.

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  10. Really enjoyed your take on the prompt, although maybe not the picture you painted. Great images and feeling in this piece.

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    1. Not all subjects are glittery-gold. Reality does bite, from time to time. Thanks, Sarah! :)

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