Thursday, May 30, 2013

Five Sentence Fiction – Desolate

The Five Sentence Fiction is a simple idea: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.


This week, Lillie chose the word "Desolate," and here we discover a lonely city that collapses from loneliness.
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The smell of decay abounds. 
The mildew, the cracked streets, and the grass that grows in tufts from beneath the concrete and stone all give evidence that the city had been abandoned purposefully--like a sacrifice left to the old gods.
Surrendered to the elements...to rot for no known reason.
A hot wind whips through the wide thoroughfare, moaning the fate of the empty halls and storefronts.
The spirit of the builders exists only as vague reflections in the crumbling architecture.

16 comments:

  1. So vivid and strong beautifully woven phrases.

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  2. Reminds me of watching those "Population Zero" programs. I think they were on the National Geographic channel.

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    1. Sounds like a fair comparison. Thanks Morella!

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  3. A great take on the prompt Phil. You squeezed a lot of imagery into your five sentences.

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  4. Fantastic imagery of desolation in so few words. xx

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  5. This makes me think of the current state of many urban areas lost to the "economy".

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    1. It very well could be what happened. Sad state of affairs, either way.

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  6. Great wordpictures -- I was able to both visualize and smell the desolation...

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  7. I am always entranced by post-apocalyptical stories yet always wonder what brought about such a cataclysmic turn. Very cool stuff.

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