Wednesday, June 12, 2013

Five Sentence Fiction – Home

The Five Sentence Fiction is a simple idea: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.


This week, Lillie chose the word "Home," a place to which we often wish we could return.
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 Far away and behind him, home was but a distant memory.
The dark of night had to camouflage him as he escaped.
There was no family to grieve his departure, no relative to see him off, only pain of heartache from within as he packed his meager belongings and fled. 
His last glimpse of the fluttering fire as his home burned was all that bade him farewell.
On the run, forever, he could never return--at least, not while the king lived.

22 comments:

  1. Wow! This was really good! You definitely had me glued in. I didn't want it to end. :)

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  2. Engaging from the start. Love the ending. Great writing woven throughout.

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  3. Cool little story! Could be the beginnings of something bigger.

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    1. Actually, in a way....it is! :) Glad you liked it.

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  4. I love this so much! Beautifully dark and the start of an epic, Phil!

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    1. Thank you, Donna.... I'll think about "more." :)

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  6. Good story - would be a great beginning to a period piece...

    ...but, say, aren't you supposed to be editing?

    (For those who might not know, Phil is editing his novel "Minimal" and many of us are waiting to see the final version!)

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    1. I'm procrastinating! :) Glad you enjoyed this, K.R!

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  7. Very nicely done. So much information packed into a small little tale. I would love to know more of his future.

    Barbara @ allmylivesnow.com

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    1. Thanks, Barbara! This sort of is a beginning to something bigger....

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  8. Intriguing! I wonder if the king killed his family?

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    1. Sounds like it. :) Thanks for writing.

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