Thursday, June 27, 2013

Five Sentence Fiction – View

The Five Sentence Fiction is a simple idea: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.


This week, Lillie chose the word "View," and this dystopian view is pretty harsh.
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 Twenty years ago, the scenery from the window was of lush, green fields, rich with life--living in a rural, farm community, I saw the countryside in a blessed, natural state--it was heaven.
 But that was before "The Collapse," when the last of the bees died.
 Pesticides took their unfathomable toll; and when the bees were gone, all agriculture went with it...and so did the animals that fed on those plants and those that fed on the animals suffered even worse.
 Now, when I look, there's only brown dirt, with scant few weeds holding it all together.
 We did it to ourselves, which is why I say humanity cannot be intelligent life, for no other species works so diligently to bring about its own demise.

8 comments:

  1. This happens only if "they" win. We little guys can do things like plant gardens that attract bees. I do a butterfly garden for bees and butterflies. Powerful write. There has to be a forceful movement toward ending this thinking. It's not the majority, for sure.

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    1. If nothing, it makes a person think. Thanks, Maggie.

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  2. Well done. This is a piece that holds a very real fear.

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    1. It also shows my particular brand of "why are we so stupid?" in a manner that's more or less palatable. :) Thanks, Ann!

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  3. A frightening example of how the human race can be too smart for our own good. A real situation that needs to be addressed. Good idea.

    Barbara @ www.allmylivesnow.com

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  4. A very powerful piece that is as much a warning as it is frightening and real. Good job!!


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