Thursday, July 11, 2013

Five Sentence Fiction – Locked

The Five Sentence Fiction is a simple idea: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.


This week, Lillie chose the word "Locked."
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 The sword opened him like a key fitting into a lock, and his chest spilled precious treasure.
There was no time to scream, no chance to avoid the blow, only time enough to gasp, wide-eyed and terror filled as the blade drank deep.
"Hush now, child," he heard, "Sleep, this will be over soon."
He could feel the flow of vital essence drain down his leg and from there pool on the ground.
"Mother..." he prayed in whisper as he collapsed and slipped from the steel, toppling over he kissed his own grave with full force.

14 comments:

  1. As human beings, we are a locked system.

    The edge of the sword opened it and let out our own mystery!

    I do enjoyed the tale, even if all my being quivered at the image it aroused!

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  2. You really like chopping people up! Quite a different take on the prompt!

    I like your writing, but I do sleep easier knowing we don't live next door to each other! Nothing personal, of course...

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    1. Sometimes, tragic endings are more interesting to write! :)

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  4. Loved the take on the prompt and the dark, visceral wording!

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  5. Oh, my...this was very tragic..."Mother"...

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  6. Lisa and Ann... Thanks for liking it! :)

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  7. I am told many hear their mother's voice encouraging them when in great pain. It seems this man did.

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    1. Yes, and I have seen grown men cry and ask for mommy. Sometimes, it's all too late. Thanks for writing, Patricia!

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